you don't need the first paragraph as it says very little (and contains a spelling error), the second paragraph is much better in terms of focus and awareness.
paragraph 3 requires you to explicitly state how the male bias is catered for and in turn creates gratification and self indentity.
paragrap 4 could be more succinct. You make good points but perhaps take too long to link them to clear evidence.
The idea to include details about audience feedback is very good and could be extended to include more oppositional readings.
Overall this is a good response, my main targets would be to scrap paragraph 1, try to acknowledge a preferred/oppositional reading in each paragraph. I would place this at an A (20 - 23).
Your media language response needs more 'media language' in it. Refer to the shot types used, the fonts, rule of thirds, white space etc. Currently it feels vague.
For example when discussing the cover model state that he is posed in a medium long shot, framed centrally against a white background in order to connote..."
Your target for this response is terminology. Due to the lack of terminology I would only place this at a high C (16 - 18)
you don't need the first paragraph as it says very little (and contains a spelling error), the second paragraph is much better in terms of focus and awareness.
ReplyDeleteparagraph 3 requires you to explicitly state how the male bias is catered for and in turn creates gratification and self indentity.
paragrap 4 could be more succinct. You make good points but perhaps take too long to link them to clear evidence.
The idea to include details about audience feedback is very good and could be extended to include more oppositional readings.
Overall this is a good response, my main targets would be to scrap paragraph 1, try to acknowledge a preferred/oppositional reading in each paragraph. I would place this at an A (20 - 23).
Your media language response needs more 'media language' in it. Refer to the shot types used, the fonts, rule of thirds, white space etc. Currently it feels vague.
For example when discussing the cover model state that he is posed in a medium long shot, framed centrally against a white background in order to connote..."
Your target for this response is terminology. Due to the lack of terminology I would only place this at a high C (16 - 18)